A name,
No, it's much more,
Determination, hard work, and commitment,
Also a goal, a dream,
To be remembered not just for money or fame,
But what I have made of my life,
For people to remember my name,
And my rise to the top,
And how I did it the right way,
By working my hardest,
To represent my city,
How I rose like a fire,
And won my title,
While the enemy lay defeated,
How I went from the very bottom,
To the very top,
How in a sport of gladiators,
I was a champion,
How in a battlefield stained in blood, sweat, and tears,
I was the champion,
The beginning of how darrian,
Became known,
The first step towards the dream,
Something I vision everyday,
When I want to give up,
And not run that extra mile,
Not do the extra rep,
Not do the extra sprint,
Something I have been working half my life for,
A state championship.
I like how you said your name was much more than a name but how people see you
ReplyDeleteKeep its up
ReplyDeleteThat was really awesome. I love how you talked about not giving up
ReplyDeleteI like the meaning behind ur poem. Lol it was inspiring
ReplyDeleteSorry for coughing while you were reading!!!! Nice poem :) you put your goals and dreams into it and I thought it was good!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you tied in something personal about yourself, working towards a state championship (: nice job.
ReplyDeleteExcellent job I like you examples how you say you rose this a fire that was neat
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said a battlefield stained in blood, sweat, and tears
ReplyDeleteLiked how you related your name to something you liked to do. Nicely written.
ReplyDeleteDarrian, I like how you focus on using your name to represent your city. Very creative.
ReplyDeleteI liked your analogies, well read and written. Great job!! I like how you connected it to yourself and your goals! :D again, great job!!
ReplyDeleteI liked your "poem" a lot . I like how you ended it about winning a state championship . It shows that you're determined and goal setting .
ReplyDeleteAmazing, powerful stuff man. I like how the end summed up all the previous writing.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you put something extracurricular into something meaningful about yourself.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you made your name seem like much more then a name. And how you took a sport and made it seem like an intense battle, good job Ginga Ninja.
ReplyDeleteI like how you not only wrote Bout you name, but also about something that is very important to you. I like how you talked about how you had to make a name for yourself, because you have an uncommon name. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteI like how u don't want to be remembered for money or fame . That's
ReplyDeleteA good thing. It was a good inspirational poem and you put your dreams and goals into it. :)